As I walked down the sidewalk thinking about what I would do to them rascals when I got me hands on them. I walked into town hoping that they were at the court house where I was guessing them to be. As I walked in I saw that it was an important part so I stood at the back of the court house waiting for Atticus to finish talking so that I could hand him the letter that Miss. Alexandra had wrote. As I walked up the isle I looked for the little ones but I didn't see them, left or right. I headed up to Atticus and asked the judge if I could hand him a letter. As I handed it to him I saw a sad look on his face that showed that he really hoped that he won. As soon as I said what the letter was about Mr. Underwood pointed out to us that all them children were just yonder in the balcony, right next to the reverend. As I walked briskly to the stairs I saw them coming down and I couldn't help but be relived when I saw them. But that feeling was soon overcome with anger when I saw that smug look on Jems face.
We walked back to the house, the two little ones mostly in silence and Jem trying to tell me about the case, but I didn't let him. Every time he would try to talk I wold shush him with my complains upon his behavior.
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I really liked how you chose for Calpurnia to speak. I also liked that you used the word "yonder" in your narrative because people in Maycomb seem to use that word a lot. My only criticism is that "isle" should be "aisle", but that doesn't really matter too much. Good job.
-Erica D
I liked the begining of your post becasue of the way you talk about how Calpurnia would do something to the "rascals" for their behavior. You can tell she is angry becasue of the form you put it in. I also like the last line of your first pargraph becasue it shows how she was relieved but angry at the same time, and it is very "cool" how you wrote about that feeling. The scentence being "As I walked briskly to the stairs I saw them coming down and I couldn't help but be relived when I saw them. But that feeling was soon overcome with anger when I saw that smug look on Jems face." I think that you could have put in quotes to make it better, but thats the only thing. It sounds good. Great Job!
~Haileigh
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